2009年6月英语四级作文预测及范文(五)
分类: 英语四级作文
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Does a Student Need Private Tutoring? You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)根据调查，目前在全国的大城市中有大约80%的中学生都有私人家教
2)分析中学生请家教的利弊
3)你的看法
Does a Student Need Private Tutoring?
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行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象的利弊，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述中学生请家教的现状;分析中学生请家教的利弊;谈谈“我”对中学生请家教现象的看法。
高分范文
Does a Student Need Private Tutoring?
A recent investigation shows that about 70 percent of middle school students in cities have private tutors. Such a popular practice indicates that people are [1]attaching greater importance to education. [2]However, private tutoring [3]has both advantages and disadvantages.
Many parents have no enough ability or time to help their children in study. Private tutoring is a good solution to this problem. [2]In addition, private tutoring is usually one-to-one, so the teacher can know [4]the weak points as well as [4]the strong points of the pupil, and thus teaching is, [5]in most cases, directly to the point. [2]On the other hand, private tutoring has its own disadvantages.
[2]For one thing, it takes up so much of the pupil’s time that he can hardly find enough time for rest and entertainment. [2]For another, some tutors, [5]busy “shuttling” from one family to another, [6]tend to neglect their teaching duties as tutors.
[7]Considering the above-mentioned, I think [3]the disadvantages of private tutoring outweigh its advantages.
In my opinion, greater emphasis should be laid [8]on classroom teaching and practice, [8]on the improvement of teaching quality [8]and on the tapping of the pupil’s potential. [9]Only in this way can a new generation be healthily brought up.
【亮点点评】
[1]“非常关注”。
[2]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[3]“有利有弊”。“弊大于利”。
[4]“弱点”。“优点”。
[5]插入语。
[6]“倾向于，往往”。
[7]用于得出结论。considering用作介词，意为“考虑到，鉴于”。
[8]and连接的平行结构。
[9]“only+状语”位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。
佳句临摩
1.佳句：Teaching is, in most cases, directly to the point.
临摩：无论多么困难的一项任务，只要有决心都能够完成。
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2.佳句：It takes up so much of the pupil’s time that they can har
hardly find enough time for rest and entertainment.
临摩：社会上有如此多的诱惑以至于稍一疏忽就可能误入歧途。
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3.佳句：Some tutors tend to neglect their regular teaching duties.
临摩： 传统食物的烹饪往往很耗时，而且需要花费很多时间和精力去学习。
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【KEY】
1. A task, no matter how difficult it is, can be accomplished, provided that one makes up his mind to do it.
2. There are so many temptations in the society that with a little carelessness we may go astray.
3. The cooking of traditional food tends to be time-consuming and takes much time and energy to learn.
1)根据调查，目前在全国的大城市中有大约80%的中学生都有私人家教
2)分析中学生请家教的利弊
3)你的看法
Does a Student Need Private Tutoring?
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象的利弊，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述中学生请家教的现状;分析中学生请家教的利弊;谈谈“我”对中学生请家教现象的看法。
高分范文
Does a Student Need Private Tutoring?
A recent investigation shows that about 70 percent of middle school students in cities have private tutors. Such a popular practice indicates that people are [1]attaching greater importance to education. [2]However, private tutoring [3]has both advantages and disadvantages.
Many parents have no enough ability or time to help their children in study. Private tutoring is a good solution to this problem. [2]In addition, private tutoring is usually one-to-one, so the teacher can know [4]the weak points as well as [4]the strong points of the pupil, and thus teaching is, [5]in most cases, directly to the point. [2]On the other hand, private tutoring has its own disadvantages.
[2]For one thing, it takes up so much of the pupil’s time that he can hardly find enough time for rest and entertainment. [2]For another, some tutors, [5]busy “shuttling” from one family to another, [6]tend to neglect their teaching duties as tutors.
[7]Considering the above-mentioned, I think [3]the disadvantages of private tutoring outweigh its advantages.
In my opinion, greater emphasis should be laid [8]on classroom teaching and practice, [8]on the improvement of teaching quality [8]and on the tapping of the pupil’s potential. [9]Only in this way can a new generation be healthily brought up.
【亮点点评】
[1]“非常关注”。
[2]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[3]“有利有弊”。“弊大于利”。
[4]“弱点”。“优点”。
[5]插入语。
[6]“倾向于，往往”。
[7]用于得出结论。considering用作介词，意为“考虑到，鉴于”。
[8]and连接的平行结构。
[9]“only+状语”位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。
佳句临摩
1.佳句：Teaching is, in most cases, directly to the point.
临摩：无论多么困难的一项任务，只要有决心都能够完成。
___________________________________________________________________________.
2.佳句：It takes up so much of the pupil’s time that they can har
hardly find enough time for rest and entertainment.
临摩：社会上有如此多的诱惑以至于稍一疏忽就可能误入歧途。
___________________________________________________________________________.
3.佳句：Some tutors tend to neglect their regular teaching duties.
临摩： 传统食物的烹饪往往很耗时，而且需要花费很多时间和精力去学习。
___________________________________________________________________________.
【KEY】
1. A task, no matter how difficult it is, can be accomplished, provided that one makes up his mind to do it.
2. There are so many temptations in the society that with a little carelessness we may go astray.
3. The cooking of traditional food tends to be time-consuming and takes much time and energy to learn.