2009年6月英语四级作文预测及范文(九)
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)现在很多大学生都喜欢追求名牌
2)产生这种现象的原因是什么
3)你如何看待这一现象
Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象,提纲第2点要求分析产生这种现象的原因,提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”对该现象的看法,由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。
根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:描述目前热衷于大学生追求名牌的现象;分析大学生热衷名牌的原因;阐述“我”对大学生追求名牌的看法并提出建议。
高分范文
Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands
Nowadays many college students like to pursue famous brands. From clothes to mobile phones, even study articles like electronic dictionaries and pens, they [1]are inclined to buy famous brands. [2]Moreover, many students from poor families begin to [3]follow this consumption trend as well. This phenomenon has aroused wide attention.
[4]The following reasons can account for college students’ preference for famous brands. [2]Above all, in many college students’ eyes, a famous brand is a symbol of sophistication and taste. They expect others to admire their high class and good taste. [2]What’s more, in modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, [5]which has a great attraction to young college students. [2]Besides, parents’ spoiling their children helps form their bad consumption habit.
[2]As far as I am concerned, [6]it is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands. [3]After all, most of famous brands are [7]far beyond their consumption ability. [3]Besides, [8]it is not famous brands but a person’s noble character that really makes him high class. [3]Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character [9]rather than pursuing famous brands.
【亮点点评】
[1]“有…倾向”。
[2]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、意义连贯。
[3] follow表示“跟随,追求(趋势或时尚)”
[4]用于引出原因。
[5]which引导非限制性定语从句。
[6] it为形式主语,不定式为真正主语。
[7]“远远超出他们的消费能力”。beyond表示“超出…范围”。
[8]强调句型,此处是强调主语。not…but连接并列成分。
[9]“而不是”。
佳句临摹
1. 佳句:It is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands.
临摹:对大学生来说,了解校园以外的世界是非常必要的。
___________________________________________________________________________
2. 佳句:In modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, which have a great attraction to young college students.
临摹:在世界上或许没有什么游戏像赌博
像赌博的那么有害和危险了,它经常会导致一个人破产,还会玷污人的心灵。
___________________________________________________________________________
3. 佳句:Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character rather than pursuing famous brands.
临摹:很多同学经常玩电脑游戏,这是浪费时间,而不是一种有益的放松方式。
___________________________________________________________________________
【KEY】
1. It is quite necessary for college students to get to know the world outside the campus.
2. In the world on other game is as harmful and dangerous as gambling, which often makes one bankrupt and pollutes one’s mind.
3. Many students often play on-line games, which is a waste of time rather than a beneficial way of relaxation.