2020年12月英语四级作文点评:交通方式的变化
写作解析
这次四级作文的考题是教育、沟通和交通方式的变化,虽然有别于上半年的考题电子产品,但还是和科技发展有着紧密联系。这次的考题只给了题目,自由发挥的空间比较大。一般来说,可以有两种不同的文体。如果从变化的角度展开,可以写成说明文。如果从变化带来的好处展开,可以写成单观点的议论文;如果从比较变化的利弊展开,可以写成双观点的议论文。说明文要求准确,要对事物变化的具体形式及其历史节点等比较了解,从这个角度看,说明文写起来并不容易,因此建议大家选择议论文。
从文章字数要求等方面看,本次考试继续维持了120-180字数的要求,而就议论文写作来说,达到该字数要求不会有太大压力。
下面给出的范文是一篇单观点的范文,从交通方式的好处展开论述:
Changes in the way of transportation
Thanks to the rapid development of automation and new technologies, means of transportation has changed fundamentally over the last few decades. Transformed travelling modes greatly improved people’s daily life.
To start with, the cost of transportation has dropped considerably. For example, flight and train tickets are much cheaper than before. What comes along with lower prices is more options. Besides, the speed and the level of comfort during the journey has tremendously improved. Moreover, a more extensive network allows people to travel freely not only within their usual living area, but also to farther parts of the world. The complex network of roads, highways, railways and air and sea routes connects all corners of the world.
To sum up, effective transportation systems will continue to bring convenience to people's lives. Some might argue against such stance because of the pollution caused by it, yet I’m still convinced that modern transportation system can benefit all humans.
话题的事实背景,是开篇常用的方法。可以用thanks to、owing to、due to等加名词短语引出话题发生的原因。如:Thanks to the rapid development of automation and new technologies, means of transportation has changed fundamentally over the last few decades. 接着开门见山表达自己的观点:Transformed travelling modes greatly improved people’s daily life.
中间段落将观点展开。常用的思路是给出两三条论据支撑观点。这时,用一些表示列举的词,如First, second, third或To start with, besides, moreover等都可以清晰地展现论据。范文给出了四条论据,分别从交通费用、交通方式、交通舒适度和交通便利度着手,论述了交通变化带来的好处。再展开论据的过程中,可以使用举例、假设等方法来进一步阐述,如论据一后给出了火车和飞机票价比以前便宜的例子,是很好的论证方法。
最后一段总结上文,to sum up, to conclude, in a nutshell等都是实用的表达。一般情况下,总阶段的第一句要总结文章的论点,然后加以强调或升华。
此次考试的话题,除了可以写成表示好处的单观点议论文,也可以写成分析利弊的双观点议论文。如交通方式的变化虽然带来了便利,但是也带来了噪音和空气污染;交流方式的变化让沟通更便捷,但同时造成了面对面交流的缺失和对手机的依赖;教育方式的变化可以让学习没有时间和地点的限制,但缺少了课堂互动,并不适用于所有的学生等。首段由背景引出话题并提出人们持有两方观点;中间段分别展开正反两方观点,每个观点后给出两个论据;总结段落概括正反两种观点,并给出自己的看法。